The Clans. PLEASE READ!

[Shadowstar1922]

“From this moment on, you will be known as Oakpaw. Deadfire, you will mentor this young cat,” Rockstar yowled in the camp of RockClan. The Clan was gathered around the Rockpile, where the leader gave speeches. Oakpaw had now became an apprentice of RockClan. His brother, Snakepaw, was given Mousetail as a mentor. Snakepaw had thought about becoming a medicine cat apprentice, learning the ways of medicine, and sharing dreams with their ancestors in StarClan. But Snakepaw wanted to stay with his brother. The Clan yowled “Oakpaw! Snakepaw! Oakpaw! Snakepaw!” Stoneclaw, the deputy of RockClan and Squirrelfur, his parents, yelled their names the most. Toadfur, his grandfather, was outside the elders den. He was laying down, with his paws neatly folded in front of him, and eyes narrowed. Probably to see the ceremony He retired not too long ago. He was an old cat who served his clan for a very long time. Toadfur was older than Rockstar, and he's been serving as clan leader for a long time too. You could tell that this maybe will be his last time holding a ceremony for the clans. He was the first leader of RockClan, and had stayed leader for many moons. He, with Treestar, Moonstar, and Waterstar, made the warrior code, the laws of the clans. And set the boundaries and territories for all four clans. . Out of the first leaders of the for clans of the forest, Waterstar of WaterClan was the first to die. His deputy, Rippleheart, became the new leader of WaterClan. She was leading her clan very well. WaterClan was now striving, and stronger, with their new leader. “Hey Oakpaw.” Oakpaw turned around to see Applepaw, a slender red she-cat. “Hi,” Oakpaw replied. “I'll show you to your den, um, if you want me to, that is,” Applepaw offered. “Yeah, that's fine. Please, show me,” Oakpaw stuttered. He looked back to see Squirrelfur, looking at Oakpaw, with happiness in her eyes. Stoneclaw walked over to his mate. “That's how we met, wasn't it, Squirrelfur,” Stoneclaw said. Squirrelfur nodded, still looking at Oakpaw. Weird, Oakpaw thought. He hurried after Applepaw, into the apprentice's den. “Here you go. Right next to mine,” Applepaw said, standing next to a moss bed. Feathers were surrounding the bed. “You must be tired, and it's almost night, so I looked for some feathers to warm you, from the big day,” Applepaw meowed. Oakpaw looked at the bed with the feathers, then at Applepaw. “Thank you, so much Applepaw.” Oakpaw slowly walked to the bed, and went to lay down in his bed. “It's so soft, and warm,” Oakpaw said while snuggling up. Applepaw stared at Oakpaw, and walked over to lay down in her bed. The two cats, sleeping there, together, in the apprentice's den. Everyone else was outside, having a feast from the ceremony. “Where's Oakpaw?” Snakepaw asked, looking around. Then he ran to the apprentice's den, and looked in. He saw Oakpaw and Applepaw, sleeping together in their beds. “Don't wake them honey.” A voice said. Snakepaw turned around and saw Mousetail. Mousetail was staring in the den, then looked at her apprentice. “It's a hard thing to explain. Come on, lets eat,” Mousetail said, and she walked away, flicking her tail to signal Snakepaw to follow. Snakepaw took another look in the den before running after his mentor.The morning came. Oakpaw woke up, and saw all the other apprentices gone, except Snake paw. Oh my gosh! We slept late! Oakpaw thought. He hurried to hi brother.”Snakepaw, wake up! We slept late! Come on! Get your lazy fur up!” Oakpaw hissed to Snakepaw, moving him with his paws. “Mom! Leave me be! Let me sleep! Just a little more sleep,” Snakepaw said, still half sleeping. Oakpaw sighed. He walked over to Snakepaw's limp tail. I have to do this. It's the only way to wake this furball up. Oakpaw bent down, and bit down on Snakepaw's tail, but not to hard. Snakepaw jumped out of his den, yelling so loud. “Why did you do that for! You could of hurt me!” Snakepaw growled, holding his tail, still whimpering. “I had to wake you up! It was the only way to! We slept late, and we need to do training! Come on!” Oakpaw ran out of the den. He ran right into Deadfire. Oakpaw bounced off the black tom. “You're late. What took so long?” Deadfire hissed. “ Eat something. We're going to explore the territory. Get your food, now,” Deadfire said before Oakpaw could reply. Oakpaw looked and saw Snakepaw with Mousetail. The brown she-cat greeted Snakepaw without snapping at him. Oakpaw forgot about that. He was hungry. He shouldn't worry if Deadfire snapped at him. He thought he deserved it. Oakpaw ran to the Fresh-kill pile, were food was. There was mice, birds, snakes, and rabbits. He took two small mice, and ate them quickly. “are you finished?” Deadfire's voice ran through the camp. Some cats stared at Oakpaw. Oakpaw could see Toadfur sitting with Tallfur, the other elder of RockClan. Gulping down the last piece of mice, he ran to the camp entrance. “I'm coming!” Oakpaw yelled to Deadfire. When he approached Deadfire, the black tom just stared at him. “Don't run too much. You might puke out the mice you ate,” he said, and walked through the entrance. Oakpaw looked confused. “How did you know what kind of food I was eating?” Oakpaw asked, as following Deadfire. “I can smell you. When you eat something, the smell of the prey usually sticks to your fur, thus sending off the smell of the food. As I show you the landmarks of RockClan, I will teach you scents of the big forest, shared by the four clans. Come, I will show you the Cave of Rock.” his mentor said. They headed south of the camp.
Oakpaw remembered the stories of the Cave of Rock. It was a big place that medicine cats shared dreams with StarClan. Every month the medicine cats of TreeClan, RockClan, WaterClan, and MoonClan, go to their cave, and share dreams with their ancestors. Usually, all of the medicine cats talk to each other when meeting StarClan. When a leader dies, the deputy of the clan becomes the new leader of the clan. He or she will go to the cave in their clan, to get their nine lives from StarClan. Creekwing and Nighttail, the medicine cats of RockClan told Oakpaw and Snakepaw about this while their kits, but they would never completely understood it. While Oakpaw and Deadfire walked through the rocky terrain of the territory, he would smell the scents, and know what smelled like what. “Do you need me to teach you the smells? I can see that your learning quickly, like your father, but, if you have any questions about anything, ask me, go on and ask” Deadfire said. “Um, yeah, I do. Were you an apprentice while my dad was one?” Oakpaw asked. As they neared the stream the was near the Cave of Rock, the ground was getting a little wet. “Um, yes, I was. In fact, me and your father, Stoneclaw, were born two days after each other. I was the oldest though. Stoneclaw had a sister, which is, you may know, is Bounceleg. I had no brothers, or sisters. Now, you may of know that the ground is getting wet. If you see, or actually, feel, the wetness, you know there is some kind of water, like a puddle, or a stream,” Deadfire meowed, and meowed even more. He sure does like to talk. Oakpaw blocked out his mentor's voice. He was focusing more on the sounds looks, and smells that surrounded him. Deadfire looked back, and knew that his apprentice wasn't listening. “So, you don't like my voice, eh?” Deadfire asked. Oakpaw looked up at his mentor, a little embarrassed “No! That's not it! I was just, um, learning my surroundings?” Oakpaw said.
It's okay, little one. When Nightwatcher was training me, I did the same thing.” Deadfire meowed. Oakpaw looked relieved at that, He thought that he would get in trouble for it. Then hey approached a stream. “Hmm. I think that we got off track. Come, lets head up this stream. We will then see the Cave of Rock,” Deadfire said. He started walking up the stream, and Oakpaw followed. I don''t get this cat. He's mean at one part, but then he's all nice. Weird. “Um, Deadfire, I have a question,” Oakpaw said. “Yes, what is it?” Deadfire asked. “Um, did you ever want to be deputy?” Oakpaw asked. Deadfire thought for a moment. “Well, I haven’t really thought about it good. It's a good chance that Rockstar will die. He's on his last life. No that I think about it, I wonder who Stoneclaw will chose when he becomes leader. Maybe Grayheart. He's a good warrior,” Deadfire said. “Oh, but he might chose you,” Oakpaw replied. He must know that he is one of the strongest, and young cats in RockClan. Why doesn't he think he might be the next deputy? “ Um, I don't think so. You know, you are my first apprentice. The warrior code says that before a warrior can be a deputy, he needs to have completely trained an apprentice, and, I have not,” Deadfire explained.“Who cares about the warrior code?!? I think you deserve the-” Oakpaw bumped in a black figure, and fell to the ground. He got up, and saw Deadfire looking down at Oakpaw, crossly. “What do you mean, 'who cares about the warrior code' !?! The warrior code is the law of our clan- in a matter of fact, all the clans. One way or another, you will know, all the laws that the warrior code says! And, respect it too,” Deadfire lectured. “Okay, I'm sorry. I didn't mean it that way,” Oakpaw said. He felt a little scared by Deadfire. He looked like a giant black monster when he as angry. Deadfire turned around, and started walking again. Oakpaw ran after him. “Um, am I really your first apprentice? Stoneclaw said that he trained two!”

[Shadowstar1922]

okay, i couldn't fit the WHOLE chapter. my hcapters are preety long. here's the rest.
Oakpaw asked, trying the change the subject. “Rockstar never trusted me for the little ones,” Deadfire muttered. “Why?”Oakpaw asked.
“Well, a while ago, I was framed for killing one of Briarwish's kits-well, her only kit. I was going to be driven out of the clan, or killed by Rockstar. Everyone hated me. But, the thing was, I never did it. It was Briawish's mate, Darkfang. When Nighttail- he was an apprentice at the time- looked at Snowkit, Briarwish's kit, he saw brown fur on Snowkit's fur, and clumped between her claws, which meant that she struggled. I, as you know, have black fur. Pitch-black fur! Darkfang had brown fur. Nighttail compared the brown fur with all the cats with brown fur. And guess what!” Deadfire meowed. “What??? Tell me!!!” Oakpaw insisted. “As Nighttail was checking all the cats with brown fur, Darkfang admitted that he killed his kit! His own kit! Right after that, Briarwish attacked Darkfang, and killed him. The elders, dragged Darkfang's body out into the territory and just left him there, not performing the traditional ceremony. Briarwish apologized to me. Oh, little guy, you should of seen her face. She was ready to kill me!” Deadfire explained. Oakpaw just stared at Deadfire, wide-eyed.
Oakpaw looked past his mentor. He saw a big, cave. “Deafire, is that the Cave of Rock?” Oakpaw asked. Deadfire turned around, and looked at the cave. “Yes, Oakpaw, it is the Cave of Rock. Good eye. Then, a bunch of cats busted through a couple of bushes.

[purpledeer]

Lol I love all the names fricken awesome storyline can't wait for u to post more when u finish u should print it and go to a publisher that would be sweet

[Shadowstar1922]

Lol I love all the names fricken awesome storyline can't wait for u to post more when u finish u should print it and go to a publisher that would be sweet

thaknk you so much, deer. the next chapter will be posted on Saturday, or Friday. you just gotta wait! Oh, and i don't OWN the copyrights, and ideas of this. the setting, then ames, are only mine, but how to figure out the names, and the warrior code, isn't my idea. there are websites, where you can post up your versions or the story, but, i was thinking i could start here. btw, i already have a wonderful fan-YOU!

[purpledeer]

Lol I love all the names fricken awesome storyline can't wait for u to post more when u finish u should print it and go to a publisher that would be sweet

thaknk you so much, deer. the next chapter will be posted on Saturday, or Friday. you just gotta wait! Oh, and i don't OWN the copyrights, and ideas of this. the setting, then ames, are only mine, but how to figure out the names, and the warrior code, isn't my idea. there are websites, where you can post up your versions or the story, but, i was thinking i could start here. btw, i already have a wonderful fan-YOU!

*fist pump YEA!

[Lightning Orb]

Rp?
Thar is a topic called "Role-play".. go to it, yes!

[Shadowstar1922]

Rp?
Thar is a topic called "Role-play".. go to it, yes!

for the last time. THIS DOESN'T HAVE ANYTHING TO DO WITH RP!!! IT'S A STORY. AND STORIES, EITHER GO IN THE SERIOUS DISCUSSION, OR THE GENERAL CHAT!!! OKAY?

[Lightning Orb]

Rp?
Thar is a topic called "Role-play".. go to it, yes!

for the last time. THIS DOESN'T HAVE ANYTHING TO DO WITH RP!!! IT'S A STORY. AND STORIES, EITHER GO IN THE SERIOUS DISCUSSION, OR THE GENERAL CHAT!!! OKAY?

As if someone is really gonna read that whole thing anyhow!!
Jesus lord!

[Sylvia]

You're doing quite well, I must admit.

I'd be very happy to read the rest, I write quite a few childrens books that were published locally, and did quite a few storytelling events.

Just make sure you have a clear storyline written down - otherwise it's like a picture that's a different size to it's a frame - it never looks quite right.

Amy is writing a very good novel at the moment, that is a fantasy world - PM her, she'll send you an extract - it's really great.

Also, the characters names are very similar...you might want to adapt them slightly, just so they stick in reader's heads.

Otherwise, well done, you've gained a fan in me.

[Shadowstar1922]

You're doing quite well, I must admit.

I'd be very happy to read the rest, I write quite a few childrens books that were published locally, and did quite a few storytelling events.

Just make sure you have a clear storyline written down - otherwise it's like a picture that's a different size to it's a frame - it never looks quite right.

Amy is writing a very good novel at the moment, that is a fantasy world - PM her, she'll send you an extract - it's really great.

Also, the characters names are very similar...you might want to adapt them slightly, just so they stick in reader's heads.

Otherwise, well done, you've gained a fan in me.

THANKS SO MUCH, LUCKY! YOUR MY SECOND FAN!!!!